Welcome back to my blog. Today I am doing a blog about my writing. For writing we have been learning about exploding the moment.
Exploding the moment means you write a boring sentence and exploding the moment is when you use more interesting and stronger words. We had to write an event and then write the moment and explode that moment. Here is an example I beat my friend in a race. If you are exploding the moment you would write the judge clapped his hands my leg were pumping it felt like I was going faster than a cheater then I was gone like a bullet and then I won the race.
Here is my writing
Event : touch
Moment : when I got a try.
Explode: The ref blew the whistle. Angus passed me the ball my legs were pumping as I was running down the sideline. I was as fast as a bullet I was right next to the try line I leaped and got the try. I was overjoyed, my team was cheerful.
Blue: strong words
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